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https://docs.google.com/document/d/1TG9wPfJZpHfGP-zMaiK_WNddg-7Dj4IuzVkSh_ip3bI/edit?usp=sharing
you could try not to repeat the same stuff like how you said they are on very tight budgets twice
You forgot to put your claim so you might want to put that on (:
you had a good writing and i liked your evidence but i still think that schools should not allow ads
you didn’t say where you got you info
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1xdRZ94ypAEyDue2tnib7ZSKjHef44MpYLqRWb-bLwYg/edit?usp=sharing
i really like your evidence becasue it does prove that ads should not be in schools
good closing analysis mr.melvin
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1bSIwTENn-5dHhAH7DoUe93ZCZk3hO6QHyezMGp6krNM/edit?usp=sharing
i like how u listed with commas
Junior Scholastic has to be caped
Great reasoning you gave a lot of detail!
you should do 2 space after a period but it is still good
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1oyniCnMohCW-d80B-Pe5IGaBKsp-zmh509uZ7cqmIO0/edit?usp=sharing
you have very good evidence
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1r6kY8S8ZSVFh9ED1xgXFhXKpVtydHboEfV8JMdeaYeI/edit?usp=sharing
you should only do one paragraph not too,your welcome
good evidence ,zeinabf
When you said meanwhile New Jersey… before this quote you should say what article you got the quote from, for example you could have said according to (the source).overall writing was great
Good feedback, Rayan!
could u capital the articles tittle.like j.s u can do Junior scholastic.
I like your second reason.
this is my writing i hope you like it (:
very good but you NEED to indent
First of all, there isn’t enough detail, second of all, you need caps, third of all, you spelled scholastic wrong.
Writing is great but I think that you forgot about your CA (closing anylysis).
you wrote scholastic wrong and u can go slower so u don’t make a mistake
this is my schools Ads C.E.R
Andrew Ford should be captilezed because it is a name
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1M70Krto5vutPUDutoyYEH1RBT-QSpWeB8XvZ603Qw2E/edit?usp=sharing
you weren’t that specific for who the narrator is maybe put who the author was.Also,when you said on page 1 maybe be more specific and put that at the end of the quote
ya i agree with the past comment u were not specific on the narrator
Really good but I think your evidence one is just restating your reasoning one.
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1DNli_I6xibRoqgKPO3y_fQ7CasTbk213aWI53UuQmjE/edit?usp=sharing
nice adding in where in the article where you got it from
I like how you put what source you got it from
when starting a new sentence make sure you cap the next word
i also agree because some of the words look like they are togther
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1fqKPLTg__w6G3_DdwRq0uLzuU4XBuaP3sx9XkAFC77c/edit?usp=sharing
Good work BEST FRIENDDDDDDDDDD!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
😀 😀 😀 😀 😀 😀 😀 😀 😀 😀 😀 😀 😀 😀
you might want to put quotation marks a the beginning when the narrator started talking.
good paragraph but your ” were backwards and you need more spaces after a . other wise good storey👍
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1v6ukXULatc6fiEGcvU4-lwVpdL9QMdhgNC17iNYCFDU/edit?usp=sharing
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1RTkrat-BEOf_paXDm3bG4NqyiGQM9LWFAu6Xqkizm4A/edit?usp=sharing
Hope you like it!
Great Job! but you can capitalize when there is periods and commas
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1A_lGDPEtE9VDUV0IYVP7e_Unvhp3Fu-r5Fc0YIIm_Jk/edit?usp=sharing
i like how you are being specific when you are explaining
thank you
when writting the authers last name to know where it came from you should keep it in the same sentence
your commas have to be behind the quotation marks,but you still did a good work
To be honest… I REALLY love it so much but what you can do is add more details. And please change the font !.
ur reason were very good cuz u were specifc about how like u were explaining the evidence
I did my best so plz do not question me 😀
Really nice but you can add more details
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1QlrUKfvBn7SNelnbDXCE5NS6mAoSC0Fl-d60unyAM2Y/edit?usp=sharing
donald charlie is not the author of article 2 the author is Junior scholastic
Really good but Donald Charlie is not the writer of article two the writer/author is junior scholastic.
Dear Hussien Almaarej you did not indent but its really good all your words are spelled correctly
good paragraph but you don’t have a lot of . i did not really see any hostley and there is one stop with just””’ and stuff no words i think you should check it out 👍🙂
Fatma Alselawi https://docs.google.com/document/d/1TjpWVm7sqSclQHY8bzoWqfhKcWiHrYevEbb8je0FXwg/edit?usp=sharing
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1bj2MLmiwGTwLVXSztiShV__wKGJc9DC13TunUv7spR0/edit?usp=sharing
I like how specific your reasoning was
i really liked how good ur reasonging was and how it was actually supporting ur evidence
There were good reasoning but you did not indent
instead of saying in my opinion maybe write the claim that was on the organizer
mariam leave a space when you start a new quote
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1_SQbrcjkvzNPU6W-wR-DeLVd2Hgeier9UILs0VwiQeE/edit?usp=sharing
i like you paragraph but you need to add more of the closing analysis
done
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1pFOUcVNfAsdWozy4TOEufbuIm8P66_u0CijteelVFQM/edit?usp=sharing
I did my best
you forgot a period at the end.
Rakan for your first evidence you should show what page was that because its your evidence
https://docs.google.com/document/d/14pyDOJfJkgWSd5xXUop5iI2Zqw9tHL4QgmwuoqpkO18/edit?usp=sharing
I did my best 😀
I really liked you tittle it was really interesting and it made me want to it read more
yasmee i really like you evidence
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1lDR6PPdLFKHZ_fcMTsFJ1kRsC5PfDixhOCVTNxmtpJo/edit?usp=sharing
use “””” for the artical names
Really good but when you said …..written by….. that next piece of sentence has to be on the same line. Also, your next sentence should say the narrator states that,”…………….” instead of saying the narrator states that your sentence would sound better if you actually say the narrators name. Overall good .
nhttps://docs.google.com/document/d/1Y0L56VUDIm4n7z2UFHDCSm8Oqx1mHgkURwBzlkCXE64/edit?usp=sharing
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1Pa1Xit_uoQMa2ryuGBhJfkxpEsmap_lN5TSWhF6np_A/edit?usp=sharing
i really like your evidence but at the same time i dont really get the idea if your going for should/should not
you should include more evidence about why your going for not having ads in schools
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1r1M-MvScsLG4eU7lJSbl14ZlXiCl1NJs3fYfhZuyqFY/edit?usp=sharing
good evidence
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1xNSEb8NouUxFf59UJZj3yUf9WEmtebQVYlmPtqlrzTE/edit?usp=sharing
you should cite more details on the reasoning
so make sure u double check your qution marks and ur capilize your J in Junior and make sure you check that u have parenteses.
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1GObXAll2haX5vB3798X0UPnhG2oO23bTu8tLdM4OBys/edit?usp=sharing
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1JwTTXYk842OR7cnv5vOEsjBqA0bqzQ1VWZy9P76kq0o/edit?usp=sharing
your paragraph was good but a little spelling mistake.
https://docs.google.com/document/d/14CkHPpafIcif9zVwttrPz-DpFbM_EO7H-nvP5Li1pJk/edit?usp=sharing
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1PQGwyrPU-KRaFwQj8ZMXDdrHn8sPjoxaWe2L17qYe44/edit?usp=sharing
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1v1dxsNASY2hp5uAgH8ssWLKmumWrlYyPMnFigKEK2w0/edit?usp=sharing
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1KzjN7NevhbHq_1YZC-UxNpE0542PQftF3w97yUazYik/edit?usp=sharing
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1vsNWF8a_zLf-5dLcHkh6dFmHNXeueC28A0EGx3MurFg/edit?usp=sharing
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1e4wS5E0RQerfEK–rXzljUe6FMoj0xa9higDEy8y7RI/edit?usp=sharing
I like how you use big words to catch the readers eye. Keep it up!
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1QwyFswR0Xj-YZQAbb7oUF_XB1qJaAoPPfCTweDMSKQM/edit?usp=sharing
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1KOlx0dVIHsevDPDxZWzinSGA8N-Hn9–XnYJczahpGQ/edit?usp=sharing
I really like it but their is one problem. You didn’t add spaces alot
in the begging it says adsat
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1Tiv6K7Uat5TSgyeJg6wGYPEbLjA6LpE1YboqqqIbwis/edit?usp=sharing
I like it but add more evidence for your reasoning
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1DsiqgiXcgiXNO95b9LIu4p1s6sWVafFGUjj1bfX9FNM/edit?usp=sharing
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1b5J9q33BTYM4VfqZ1U9xfntA1QhPYjjCrZ9kzcTclXk/edit?usp=sharing
I really enjoyed reading your paragraph. You explained your reasoning reasoning really good and actually made me consider switching sides from NOT allowing ads in schools to allowing ads in school!
https://docs.google.com/document/d/14ZEthX4seojQZhIGsC44H1KamMuB6QMEjnO9UKoOlWE/edit?usp=sharing
you did not add a quotation mark after per bus
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1cy6ip6hUCHX6W3XIu6HW8lr-LcXtuPePu7-saIimzls/edit?usp=sharing
your CER is really good but I think you should restate you clime in the conclusion
your CER is really good but you should restate your claim in the conclusion.
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1ifniKrSo56FkIZdZEG0zt_wOhPKy0Um-_QOAFQu89uw/edit?usp=sharing
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1nnGSrsNaK31_JFIxi2_igAuvC9aJuRdliC7h1FVjuic/edit?usp=sharing
Its pretty good but needs a better closing sentence
What could he do to improve the closing sentence? Do you have any suggestions?
https://docs.google.com/document/d/17BOrjK5VWemxIzg-Ne94kkPd6ni0yYPyIHArb8_2Sgo/edit?usp=sharing
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1TqmcI2KMAdxzfFggTUx5q3VQrhFct0R2gHpYPCY9RlI/edit?usp=sharing
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1IJBCbLQznoZAVjYGBLGyVTX8aPTNNQiMZHVCEZ6tZ0Y/edit?usp=sharing
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1I7znxnwsP18xc-f032gRW89Smqhf71wjb7PqRAMIu-U/edit?usp=sharing
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1Xk0i-ch9hHtStgWQsSjYRPKKzta8W8mUlzutzvtytEc/edit?usp=sharing
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1-SjjwsLe-HYbWylt17EU742WqZ3q2EAGkmIc2JXbpi4/edit?usp=sharing
I really liked your paragraph Abdullah. I think something to point out is the excellent vocabulary you choose. The only problem is that when you stated, “‘Million school bus riders daily in 24hrs,” it was actually 24 states, not hours.
https://docs.google.com/document/d/13HC7fIC5oOPFXkCyxle774Mss3F8ZoXeFSiE6UfBkk4/edit?usp=sharing
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1oopLqQLznHV2m3wBZz2qOk4yzWOxgkEVz0mce0ZRiDI/edit?usp=sharing
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1nrOkzmys-JVtoI8FJsmMa3O_AJ32LgwSdNt9dQCnfgg/edit?usp=sharing
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1SphJPO9R01XJ7K04jGb7Q4c0AenZ17JdXpHeIb24oyg/edit?usp=sharing
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1W4ozH09cQC6snNm7_bGnpNw6VWo9igN-tEypPapgj-s/edit?usp=sharing
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1F2brakGKazcNGVzhv0Psgcqs50pu8N4ZqfChMeQyaZI/edit?usp=sharing
Hope you like it
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https://docs.google.com/document/d/1oyniCnMohCW-d80B-Pe5IGaBKsp-zmh509uZ7cqmIO0/edit?usp=sharing
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1FIrjQNjzYjm5ghhj0dBrGi9RG7W37KpbEpwEe9UM8Xw/edit?usp=sharing
https://docs.google.com/document/d/11rmS8-zgPhJmbfEWrwP4rC8x3OHtT3Ow-liqKisJ2Eg/edit?usp=sharing
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1JV0idcjC_BND9AOm32aieC5_cRS1IrXUXJ59Vzsu9cw/edit?usp=sharing
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https://docs.google.com/document/d/1ZtUidjfoRapuYpyjngsZ_FuqzesONrBGGc-rTdovVOk/edit?usp=sharing